Pitch Feedback

For our pitch me made a Prezi and we all did at least 1/2 slides each so that to would get finished quicker. Our actual pitch was quite disorganised only because we hadn't assigned who was going to do and read what, so the roles were jumbled and people got confused during the pitch, this led to some people in the group improvising and saying the wrong things but it all came together in the end.

We were given points to help us improve, here's what was said:

• Placing of the box
• Making it clear that they're going on a date
• Not reveal too much in the opening
• Needs to be made clearer what weapon will be used

I think that the feedback given was spot on, in terms on what we need to improve. Some of the points that were mentioned were not mentioned in our pitch or explained unclear so the feedback helped us to be able establish exactly what we need and what we are going to do to make our thriller good. The points that I think were most important were the placing of the box and making it clear that the two characters in the opening are going on a date. The placing of the box is very important as it is central to our plot and the beginning and the name of the thriller is Box Plot, if the box is not placed in a place where it isn't visible to the audience and a place where it's likely that Joyce may look to find it. Also, It needs to be evident that the characters are going on a date as we want to make it seem, normal and sweet and at the very beginning, there shouldn't be clues that Alan is planning to kill her. If it is't put across that they are going on a date, then the contrast will not be there.